It had been one full week since she applied to Berkeley, but
nothing. A week and a half. Two weeks. The time was flying and she felt like
she was aging every single day. “Mom, did dad bring mail today?” she asked,
desperate yet anxious. “Yes, and there was nothing in it, honey,” her mom
replied, heartbroken. But suddenly, and unexpectedly, that day came. It was a
Saturday morning, with Naiomi idly sitting on the couch, expressionless – just
a blank look on her face. This dark brown haired, 5 feet 2 inches, 17 year-old
was the most stressful and over expecting student one could ever imagine.
“Naiomi, I think I have something for you,” hinted her mom. She slightly turned
her head towards her, and saw a simple, white, envelope in her hand addressed
to Naiomi Niraj Desai. “Ms. Naiomi Desai, Congratulations! It is our pleasure
to inform you that you have been accepted…” she stopped midway, tears rolling
down her cheeks. “Ac-cc-eepp-ted to the University of California, Berkeley.”
She was finally able to finish the sentence off. “Mom? Wha..? How? I mean, is
this real? Am I dreaming? I can’t believe it!” Even though she was the most
over expecting individual, she has always been unable to believe that whatever
she has received and will in the future, she completely deserves it.
It has been 3 months since that day. She’s now packing her
last box – teary eyed. She looked around her room, sat down on the bed and just
sobbed – she couldn't hold it in. Her mom walks in to see her cry and sits next
to her. “I can’t do it mom. I can’t leave this place. These photo frames, these
books, these clothes, this bed, and even these walls – they all have a piece of
me connected. I can’t let it go mom. And most importantly, I can’t leave you
guys.” She had poured her heart out but it still wasn't enough. She wanted to
keep talking, wanted to keep crying, wanted to keep living in that house but
her mom interrupted her. “Are you crazy? You’re basically saying that I did all
that hard work for nothing? I suffered through all those obstacles and hurdles
in life for nothing? Naiomi, separation is hard but necessary. You only have to
move 5 hours away from us and you’re crying saying it’s hard. Can you imagine
what your dad must’ve went through when he left his parents all the way across
the world, in India? Sweetie, if you won’t go there, you will not be able to
see the world with your own eyes. You won’t be able to understand it, and if
you can’t do that, then how will you make a difference? We’re born learners and
we have to grasp every opportunity to make every learning experience memorable,
okay?” “Mm-hmm.” Naiomi sniffled. “Good. At least now I’ll be able to get rid
of you. You know, you should really leave us alone sometimes.” “MOM!” The duo
shared a laugh and a hug. “Now hurry up, it’s time to go.”
“Okay, is that all?” “Yes, Dad!” “Okay then, you ready?”
Naiomi looked around and shook her head. “But I will be.” She looked at her mom
and smiled. The garage door started to open with a bang. The car door opened
and slammed shut. The car engine started with a roar. Naiomi glanced back at
her mom, who nodded at her. She was closing the door. “Mom, wait!” “What, did
you forget something?” “Yes, something really important.” She sprinted upstairs
and came with a picture of the three of them. “I need your terrifying eyes,
scaring me every morning when I wake up.” She snickered. “Well, I should be
offended but I’m actually contended,” said her mom, laughing. “Should we go?” They both held hands
and sat in the car. The journey had begun, with both of her parents by her
side, but Naiomi will have to leave the nest to learn how to fly.
Naiomi I read this and I was in awe. I was able to feel what your character felt and it created a great image in my head of everything that was going on. I also like how you incorporated yourself in your writing because the reader gets to know more about you while they are reading. If you don't mind or if you have extra time; would you mind helping me, I really want to get better at my writing skills, please.
ReplyDeleteHey Susie,
DeleteThank you so much for this. You don't know how much it means for me when someone says that they like my work. And I would love to help you in any way I can. Whenever you need me, call me up or just talk to me in class. I will do everything that I can to help you improve. Once again, thank you so much!